Gosh, I don't know if I can take being the first person to review this!
I certainly did not laugh. Well, maybe only once at this: "Two for two."
This felt..appropriately and humanly bleak. If I say not epic, will that make sense? I mean it as a compliment in how it's on such a personal level , rather than being about the grand idealism of a new beginning. You could have made it harsher I suppose, but maybe that wasn't needed to make it feel right? I certainly think what you have fits well. Early on in reading I actually forgot about the warnings for a minute until I remembered that there was no way this would end well. And there isn't a real resolution and I kind of love that.
I agree that Lee certainly can't take all of the blame for how hard their lives are going to be. It just hurts to think of when the shiny newness of it wears off. He is a very convenient scapegoat to curse about their collective failure of decision making though. ;)
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I certainly did not laugh. Well, maybe only once at this:
"Two for two."
This felt..appropriately and humanly bleak. If I say not epic, will that make sense? I mean it as a compliment in how it's on such a personal level , rather than being about the grand idealism of a new beginning. You could have made it harsher I suppose, but maybe that wasn't needed to make it feel right? I certainly think what you have fits well. Early on in reading I actually forgot about the warnings for a minute until I remembered that there was no way this would end well. And there isn't a real resolution and I kind of love that.
I agree that Lee certainly can't take all of the blame for how hard their lives are going to be. It just hurts to think of when the shiny newness of it wears off. He is a very convenient scapegoat to curse about their collective failure of decision making though. ;)