Oh, I love this. The fairy-tale conceit works so well as both a window into Cally's mind and a way of adding a sense of tension and grandeur to the story.
The lovers' conspiracy meant she was part of a group; she shared their secret.
That feels so right for her. She did seem to love being "in on it" when she was helping Chief and Boomer sneak around, and that might seem a bit odd given her later feelings for Galen, but here it makes perfect sense.
Your parentheses are brutal. :/
She didn't know what her feelings were so she defined them by what was accomplished.
I really like this line.
She was his Cally with the small, agile hands to fix things. She tried to fix him and it worked. She pieced him together again.
Aw! And I think she actually did, if only temporarily. I'm not sure he would have recovered so quickly if she hadn't forgiven him.
I absolutely love the part where Chief opens up to hope after they discover New Caprica and convinces her to have children. There is a small typo where you repeat the words "at first."
Monsters invaded the land, some with great claws to snatch and tear, others with disguises to mask their bestial nature, siren lures and angry menaces.
I imagine that's exactly what it felt like. As well as Sharon seeming to gloat over her predicament - but also that Cally needed to see her that way. (Though really, she did her a huge favor either way! Grrr. Hate Cally-hate.)
She shivers and doesn’t know why. She only sees her husband. She doesn’t see fangs and claws behind a mask.)
Ahhhh! Poor Cally! And I'm left pondering the meaning of that ending; is it that she's failing to see him for what he truly is, or that she will start to see him that way (even though he's the same Chief he's always been) once she learns the truth? You really are the master of the devastating finishes!
no subject
The lovers' conspiracy meant she was part of a group; she shared their secret.
That feels so right for her. She did seem to love being "in on it" when she was helping Chief and Boomer sneak around, and that might seem a bit odd given her later feelings for Galen, but here it makes perfect sense.
Your parentheses are brutal. :/
She didn't know what her feelings were so she defined them by what was accomplished.
I really like this line.
She was his Cally with the small, agile hands to fix things. She tried to fix him and it worked. She pieced him together again.
Aw! And I think she actually did, if only temporarily. I'm not sure he would have recovered so quickly if she hadn't forgiven him.
I absolutely love the part where Chief opens up to hope after they discover New Caprica and convinces her to have children. There is a small typo where you repeat the words "at first."
Monsters invaded the land, some with great claws to snatch and tear, others with disguises to mask their bestial nature, siren lures and angry menaces.
I imagine that's exactly what it felt like. As well as Sharon seeming to gloat over her predicament - but also that Cally needed to see her that way. (Though really, she did her a huge favor either way! Grrr. Hate Cally-hate.)
She shivers and doesn’t know why. She only sees her husband. She doesn’t see fangs and claws behind a mask.)
Ahhhh! Poor Cally! And I'm left pondering the meaning of that ending; is it that she's failing to see him for what he truly is, or that she will start to see him that way (even though he's the same Chief he's always been) once she learns the truth? You really are the master of the devastating finishes!